Introduction, One Body, Conclusion Paragraph • Online Nursing Essays

Initial Post Instructions

Part 1: By Tuesday Night, Share Your Writing as Your Initial Post 

In writing workshops, you will be asked to share, as your first post, a specific piece of writing you are working on at the time, along with some comments or adjustments, depending on the assignment. This week, the piece of writing is your Week 4 Assignment: Introduction, One Body Paragraph, and Conclusion.

1. Please post your writing from Week 4 Introduction, One Body, and Conclusion Paragraphs and use the sample completed items in that worksheet for guidance.  
2. Make an initial post with your essay attached. In your initial post, please ask at least one question for your reviewer to answer. For example, are you unsure about the strength of your thesis statement? Or you might ask your peer for ideas for details within body paragraphs. 
3. Keep in mind that next week, you will submit a full draft of your Argument Research Essay to your instructor for grading and feedback during Week 6. 

*Copying from your classmates’ posts or replies in any way, on any item will be considered plagiarism and will be handled as such. Your instructor may, at any time, check anything you post in workshops for plagiarism by submitting it to Turnitin.  

Peer Review Post Instructions 

Part 2: By Saturday Night, Complete One Full Peer Review for a Classmate 

• Choose one classmate who has made their initial post and who does not already have a peer review. Read their question for you in the post, then open their attachment of their Introduction, One Body and Conclusion paragraphs. 
• Download and complete the Peer Review Worksheet. Complete all tasks with substance (more than just “yes” or “no”). 
• Reply to your classmate’s initial post and attach the Peer Review Worksheet you completed over their writing.  
• Your peer review is worth 50% of your grade for this writing workshop; please do your best! 

Continue the Conversation Post Instructions 

Part 3: By Sunday Night, Continue the Conversation  

In addition to making your own initial post and finishing a peer review for one classmate, you must also continue the conversation by making at least 1 additional post of at least 3 full sentences in length. This post may do any of the following: 

• Respond (kindly) to one of the peer reviews classmates have given you. 
• Respond (kindly) to any questions your classmate may have for you about the peer review you completed. 
• Respond (kindly) to a classmate you did not previously review, with some brief comments about their writing. 

Please see some sample Continue the Conversation posts Links to an external site. here. 

How to “Continue the Conversation” after You’ve Posted Your Peer Reviews

You are required to make 3 total posts in each Writing Workshop:

• Your main post, with your writing, according to instructions
• Your one peer review for a classmate, using the Peer Review Sheet assigned
• Your one “Continuing the Conversation” post, at least 3 sentences in length and following the instructions and examples below

It is important to continue the conversation after you have posted your two required peer reviews for many reasons:

• To continue learning from your classmates
• To offer more insight to your classmates
• To explore in more depth some of the topics addressed
• To ask questions
• To answer questions

So, some examples of “Continue the Conversation” posts might be:

• Hi Mary! I didn’t review your work, but I did read through it. I have to say that I had never considered the specific ways in which one might get a deadly infection doing simple activities at home. It really made me think about watching my own little cuts and about how, before antibiotics, the world was simply deadly.

Thank you! -Susan

• Jeff, I noticed that you used details about roadblocks to getting basic jobs, and I don’t know if this will be helpful, but for women, there are additional issues. Some of those might include…. (then you would offer some examples to Jeff) ….  I love your topic!

– Sally

• Hey June! I hope you’re having a good day. So, although I didn’t do a formal peer review for you, I was captivated by your topic of the benefits of having possums around your yard. I just thought it was neat that you know so much that you don’t have to look up information to develop your whole essay. I understand; I know there are topics that we deal with in different places; I just can’t imagine growing up taking possums for granted.

Best, Mark

• Fred, thank you so much for reviewing my prewriting! I’m glad you noticed that one of my main ideas has far fewer examples than the other two. I sort of felt that way, too, and I’m going to brainstorm more. Do you have a couple of ideas, or does anyone here- classmates, I’d love some help!

Cheers! -Bruce

• Hello, Francis! You are very welcome; it was my pleasure to review your writing. You asked about why I thought your main ideas don’t quite match, and that’s a great question. This is just my perspective as a reader, but I expected, from a topic like “types of chocolate,” to see main ideas like milk chocolate, dark chocolate, and baker’s chocolate. I think that having three countries who make good chocolate is an excellent approach; maybe change your overall topic to match- like, “chocolate from different countries.” I’m happy to discuss more!

Have a great day, Melanie

Hello, class, and welcome to another workshop!  

As always, please know that this is a safe space. The writing you post will be some brief initial ideas and planning toward your full essay of the term. 

A quick reminder of some basics of Writing Workshops: 

• Everyone is required to be kind and supportive, and there is nothing in the assignment or peer review that should intimidate you. However, speak to me if you have any questions or concerns. 
• I will monitor this area to make sure everyone is happy and doing well, but I will not publicly comment on your work or peer reviews–this will give you an added layer of safety, knowing you will not be publicly mentioned or offered feedback from me publicly. All of my feedback on your writing will be on submitted assignments that are private between you and me. 
• I will also make posts here that help you with the topics and the assignment throughout the week. Be sure to look for those and consider them instructional material for your success. Feel free to reply to those posts with any questions; we can have conversations here on those! 
• Most of all, I’d love you to have fun in Writing Workshops and use them to understand the possibilities better and to learn from one another in a collaborative environment.  

Post your 3 paragraphs for your Argument Research Essay completed during Week 4 by Tuesday as your main post, making sure to read the workshop instructions above and follow the instructions on the worksheet. Then, by Saturday, you will post one peer review, using the Peer Review Worksheet. By Sunday, you will make an additional post, as noted in the instructions above. 

Week 5 Peer Review Worksheet 

(The worksheet begins on page 2, but please review page 1 very carefully.) 

Stop. Are you reviewing a classmate who already has a review or reviews? Remember: Review a classmate with no reviews if at all possible. A good pattern (but not required) to follow is submissions 1 and 2 review each other’s paper, then 3 and 4 and so on and so forth.

Required Resources 

• Your chosen classmate’s main post with questions and Week 5 Peer Review Worksheet for the Writing Workshop. 

Notes 

• You will complete the peer review worksheet on pages 2-3 of this document and attach the completed Peer Review Worksheet as a reply to the classmate’s initial post. 
• Peer Reviews are due posted by Saturday night. 
• Try to review classmates who do not yet have any reviews. 
• Do not copy or plagiarize in any way in the Writing Workshop. 

Very Important Reminders: 

• Be honest yet kind and supportive. 
• It is understood that you are not an English teacher. Writing workshops are not designed that way. Rather, this is your chance to commune with other writers for growth all around. Your answers to peer review questions will be based on your understanding of the concepts you are studying and on your approach to writing your own Argument Research Essay.
• Students are not required to use the feedback given to them by classmates; this activity helps you see how many others have approached the assignment, how you can personally do better, and how you might support other learners. 
• Your instructor will not critique anyone publicly here. This is your space for interaction. Your instructor will post resources throughout the week for the class, but the instructor will not “butt in” on the review process.  
• Again, be kind and supportive in every word you write for a peer review.  
• The Peer Review Worksheet begins on the next page. You do not need to include this instructions/reminders page when you post the review if you do not wish to. 
• Type or write by hand- either is fine, as long as it is readable.  

Your Name: (write your name here) 

The Name of Your Classmate Being Reviewed: (write your classmate’s name here) 

Peer Review Questions – Required – Please type your answers in the right-hand column below. 

Question/Task	Answer/Explanation
Read through your classmate’s paragraphs. What about them do you like best? Please share at least two areas you feel are done well, or appeal to a reader and explain why.	Respond in 2 full sentences.  I was impressed of how many Native language was spoke back in the time before white immigrants come over and how much affected to those Native language to the point were 50% disappear. The introduction was well done because the beginning starts by asking the reader question and this draws the reader in.
Read through your classmate’s introductory paragraph. Based on this initial read-through, what is the student’s thesis statement? Write it in one sentence to the right.    Explain how you know this is the thesis and why it is a strong thesis.    If you are not certain what the thesis is, explain what is needed to make it clearer.	Respond in 2 full sentences.  “It was the goal of the white people to abolish and eradicate the entire native culture.”   Because it’s the last sentence in the introduction paragraph. Actually, I am having hard time finding a clear thesis, his lasts sentence state the topic but not the points he will use to support the topic.
Read through your classmate’s Introductory paragraph again. Then, answer these questions about the supporting sentences:    How many supporting sentences are there?    Are there any short, choppy sentences that could be combined? How? Are you able to clearly identify the topic of the paper and the supporting details? What are they? If now, explain how the writer can fix it.   Then, as a reader, explain how the writer could make the paragraph clearer. What details might be added? What generalities might be eliminated? In other words, how can your classmate help the reader really “do” the step better?	For a supporting sentence I only see one that is considered a fact, Ye I can identify the topic but the supporting details are not clearly stated in the thesis for, however they are int the body paragraph explaining about how white immigrants try to abolish their culture by obligating the kid to go to boarding school where they are not allow to speak their  Native language or practice their worship, and tried to assimilate the adults into the white culture by “becoming more civilized.”   In my opinion he is doing great job I just feel like it needs more supporting statements in order the reader could assure about the topic.
Read through your classmate’s one body paragraph again.   Is there a topic sentence?   Do the sentences flow smoothly from one to the next? Are there any places where you feel the flow is disrupted? Explain why and offer specific suggestions.     If there are no places where you feel the flow is disrupted, explain specifically what your classmate has done to make the paragraph flow well?   Does the paragraph seamlessly incorporate resource information? Is resource information effectively used and cited?   Is there a strong conclusion sentence that helps close out the topic? If not, how could they make it stronger?	Respond in at least 4 full sentences.    Yes it is “ So serious were these settlers in removing the indigenous culture, that they resorted to taking indigenous children from their homes and families and forcing them to live in boarding schools where they would learn the white culture and white ways.” Actually its flows well and the connection its easy to follow.   The resources as I mentioned before it need more quotation and cited to support the topic.
Read through your classmate’s conclusion paragraph.   Does the paragraph clearly restate the thesis again in different words?   Did the paragraph summarize the main points of the essay? If not, what is missing?   Did the paragraph have a strong ending sentence to close out the essay? If not, what could the writer do to make it stronger?	Respond in at least 2 sentences.    It does, a very good and precise conclusion, sustaining the purpose and to continue the goal of a good outcome.
Does the writer have a properly formatted APA reference page including at least one scholarly resource?   Comment on the quality of the resources listed and any APA feedback you feel comfortable providing.	Respond in at least 1 sentence I am not sure if I am right with this comment, but I did not see the title and number of the pages. Also I am not sure if the paper needs to be separated in groups as shows there or because it’s a draft paper its ok.